You have that ability to rhyme, which I definitely don't have - but I do know this poem flows perfectly. Really I think you've penned something easy to relate to here, but it wouldn't be a bad idea to add some punctuation. Otherwise, good job!

This poem was very sad yet it had a sweet ending to it.

"But someday she will
feel it and all will be done
Shimmering in her beauty
much brighter than the sun"

^ I absolutely adore your ending.

5/5

This poem was very sad yet it had a sweet ending to it.

"But someday she will
feel it and all will be done
Shimmering in her beauty
much brighter than the sun"

^ I absolutely adore your ending.

5/5