This is really good for it to be your first poem :O my first poem i was like 8 and i still dont think i am this good!!! you seriously done amazing!!!! I love it 5/5

I was thinking along these lines a few days ago. :)
That its rather a pity we stopped speaking such beautiful words, to become lazy in our language.
5/5
For a first poem in so long, I think you did a good job.

Loved it

Awesome, wonderful and amazing,,, I can't seem to get enough :) 5/5

A true poem...we had an essay competition with this topic...I could relate a lot!
nice wording,good flow...good attempt...:]

OMG.

Another great piece. And a it gives a good point.

O' brave the soul that hast but a tiny flinch of remorse for the undoing of the script. Yhou shalt be blessed , may the crusade not be in vain. A bid thee a fond adue!