by Jenni
I think that this is a very well written poem because of its powerful emotions and your choice of words. I like the fact that it somehow leaves space for own interpretations, which makes it quite relateable. You're refering to the loss of something, that might still be there after all yet you feel like you don't belong to it and knowing that makes it so much harder to endure. Definately worth another read. |
by Rihanna
Deep emotions shown in this |
by Purple Rose
Solus, this reminds so much of myself. I often have thoughts like these when I am in a depressed state - it seemed like you were in one of those when you wrote this. |
by Sunshine
You know what I found beautiful about this poem, the way you lined the words into sentences rather than stanzas, not only did it reflect this "im venting" mood. but also it showed that you are writing to feel better, to be honest, and to let some stuff out and off your chest, that you are not organizing it into stanzas that look beautiful and in size. |
Again I like stuff like this. Very open to interpretation. Full of emotion and philosophy! |
by Em
I really liked this as it has many interpretations but mine is that you are wanting to go back in time to a tine you felt some inner peace maybe still depressed because you state 'it hurt there' now I am guessing that because you were outside of something beautiful it's like you were outside your body looking in. I don't know why I think this but. When we are depressive we have those thoughts of wanting to die at our lowest points. |