Comments : Roses

  • 13 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Ah, this was lovely.

    "Let's start with the pinks, as gentle as you," -- I really loved this line. The colour pink in general has a soft, baby theme to it; it's girly, pretty and innocent, which appear to all be descriptions of the person being described.

    "they cry upon my soul that I apologies." -- This is a lovely description; there's something so strong about the wording of "cry upon my soul". However, I think it should be "apologise" instead of "apologies", as the latter means more than one apology, as in: "..he offered up his apologies."

    "Please accept my apology." was all he said -- here it should also be a comma after 'apology' not a full stop.

    It was a very lovely poem, I enjoyed the read. :)

  • 13 years ago

    by A lonely soul

    I have to say, I never never read a poem that tells the significance of each rose color so well. Great write