Greatly done but sad,,,I wish her the best and lotz luck 5/5

This poem shows you have the power to put yourself in someone elses shoes. It can be hard to write about other people but did it so well

5/5

Omg, Jessi.

HIGH FIVE!!

I really love the idea behind that. Though your words didn't touch me immensely.. but, you structured your thoughts perfectly.. And the ending: SUPER!

FIVE

"They say she got attitude,
she says shes just living. "

shes should have an '... "she's" ;)

This poem is really sad and something I think a lot of young girls can relate to. We often follow in footsteps that look like we're making it, but in reality we're only dooming ourselves. I'll keep your friend in my prayers, this is just heartbreaking. I hope she can realize the destruction she is doing to herself and can realize that there is another and better way to live your life. Be strong and be there for her, she needs good friends :)

The only thing I'd recommend to change is the title because it's too simple and it doesn't tell anything about this poem, well obviously it's a story about a girl, but I think it'd be better if you used a title that'd somehow give a hint what this poem is going to be dealing with.

I enjoyed how the story in this poem slowly developes because that kept me interested. It's better to tell little by little than reveal the whole truth right away. I didn't expect it this way either. The feelings in this poem are strong and they touched me, I felt quite sad while reading this and I can imagine how you feel too because you want to help her, but don't exactly know what you may do for her.

Hanna is in my prayers and reminds me of someone I know

This is a very interesting poem

Oh poor hanna...!
It's fantastic of you to showcase a girl's plight through you poem and in return what she gets is wishes and hopes to be on-track soon....!
I really applaud you for this...
great work jessi...
I hope you to personally try and influence her in the right way....:]

Wow that is very intense... alot of visuals given in this poem.... honestly the type of thing that
happens if people are raised in bad homes

Thank you for the great imagery :)

Absolutely beautiful x