by Boy Oct 27, 2011
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
Screamed voices midnight |
by Saerelune
I see that your syllable count is spot-on, and you also classically divided the poem into two sections. Although I think that the first line could've been more precise. I see the way "screamed" and "voices" fit together, but not really the way "midnight" adds anything to it. I suggest you focus on this horrifying noise only. Nevertheless, I think this haiku had quite a funny tone to it (in the second and third line), perhaps due to its rhyme and innocence. |
by Decayed
Haikus are hard to write. One should master the completion of an idea to write one. |
by Tara Kay
I don't want to sound rude or anything, or like I am critisising too much, |
by Ms Happiness
I love the idea of the poem:) 1 poem and u'll reach 100 yupppyyyyy:D |