Mi dushi

Yaki,

or perhaps,
the way your pale
skin allows me to
map your veins..
and I memorize
their every curve
the same way a
child memorizes
the way home..

This is pure beauty, I know many have pointed it out but you should know that you entwined the most complex of emotions with such a simplistic and elegant tone that I can't even grasp onto it. Your writing has come a long way and it's the purity I find within your words that can ease my soul because I know that you too are feeling what I feel when I'm lost somewhere between love and saddness.

Beautiful write, enjoyed the incorporation of Papimanento, such an interesting language.

Mel.

Vivid imagery, softly written. Wonderful!

Maybe its the way
your hair often smells
like strawberries,
or because your
lips are so pink-
you know...that kind
of pink the sky often has
whenever a cloudy sunset
takes place..

I just love the way this is described, it's quite creative comparing his lips to the pink in the sky, it really is, this is my favorite stanza.

or perhaps,
the way your pale
skin allows me to
map your veins..
and I memorize
their every curve
the same way a
child memorizes
the way home...

Another creative stanza, a pale skin that allows veins to shine through and the way you say map them, I would never thought of this.

there is just something
so special about you..

mi dushi,

and I think
that maybe,
Its just the way you
say love me.

And finally a very sweet stanza to end this lovely poem, I really enjoyed reading it and I'm giving it 5/5

Or perhaps,
the way your pale
skin allows me to
map your veins..
and I memorize
their every curve
the same way a
child memorizes
the way home...

^ Woah! brilliant scene!

Ahhh YAKI!

This is beautiful! I love the use of strawberries (definitely the scent stuck out!), and we had that kind of sunrise this morning, it was very pink, because of the fog we had. It was gorgeous, and this reminded me of that awesome scenery!

I love the contrast of the pale skin/veins. Beautiful imagery, beautiful!! I loved this piece. Thanks for the translation, I would've never figured it out. lol. ;)