River of thoughts (A collab)

by A lonely soul   Nov 5, 2011


Sitting on the top of a dry riverbed
is a rock in a parched valley.
Like my thoughts, stuck in my head
barren, nebulous, and clueless
without enticement to move
from their utter desolation

I pray for a cloudburst, a thunderstorm
Buckets of rain water to open the gates
and flood this dry gorge with thoughts and imagination galore
Create a mighty flood to move that rock
and flood my dry valley of thoughts with inspiration

Oh Almighty, open your flood gates
and liberate my river of thoughts
from its rocky obstruction
let it flow, let it gallop
fast and furious like a gazelle

Open my mind's shut eye
unshackle my chain of thoughts
let them flow with ease, and
soar up, above and beyond
to a land of unlimited imagination

Composition by: Everlasting
Reworded by: A lonely soul

This one is really a reworded version of "Come in with the Rain" by Everlasting, submitted by her in Noura's contest. Just redecorated with a few of my thoughts. So please also copy your comments on to hers here:
http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/life/poems.php?id=1180262

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  • 13 years ago

    by Cinnamonspice

    A very nice write, wording was excellent with a gentle flow.

    Connie

  • 13 years ago

    by Georgia

    This poem is so well written. An excellent job and a simply beautiful write 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Liliana

    I pray for a cloudburst, a thunderstorm
    Buckets of rain water to open the gates
    and flood this dry gorge with thoughts and imagination galore
    Create a mighty flood to move that rock
    and flood my dry valley of thoughts with inspiration.

    wow this is amazing, the emotions of this poem are trully powerfull and the words put together all flow really well

    Edited: Lol im sorry wrong copy and paste

  • 13 years ago

    by Innocent Fairy

    Oh that's right I rated it or just read it but never left a comment,,,I love love loved it it's amazing and greatly worded and written,,,a fantastic wonderful peice,, great work you two :) 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Ms Happiness

    I love it:) great job a 5/5:)

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