Me, myself and I (Lento)

It's the first time I hear of a Lento.

I think you really did great in linking your ideas and provoking the reader's mind with beautiful imagery. But honestly, I don't dig forms.. well, except haikus :p haha

Nevertheless, I think it's perfectly written. ;)

So, now, I'm back.

Clean floats my abstract existence
serene, an enveloping canopy of clouds it abides
unseen my body and I lay, conspiring
between scenery below my heaviness resides

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I felt so dreamy, so so dreamy, you cannot be serious, Zahra? I don't know how to pen something about life in this way, teach me. ;P

Author of life, myself below teaches me
ardor is where I aspire to be, however
bitter are both compared to where I stand
Yonder I shred chocolate fractures of memories forever

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Wow....I don't know what to comment, like seriously...I promised to leave a longer comment, but wtf...haha I'm not finding words!

I have oneeee suggestion that is soooooo small....tiny tiny tinyyy...

make it a free versed...poem..like
ummmm...
not two stanzas, it feells a it weird the way it is now, hun

I don't know maybe it's just me! ;)

Lovely write nominated the next weeek

Zahra, I apologize, I now am not able to leave a long detailed comment, I'll comment later, why am I here then? because I adored this piece 100%. Mwa.