This is amazing and wow just wonderful
It is greatly worded and written I loved it and loved reading it,,,terrific job 5/5

I love the imagery and symoblism in this piece. I love the smooth easy flow and the simple word choice that really makes the piece stand out in comparision to many other sad pieces. The description is amazing and the whole piece is excellent. Fabuloud job, 5/5

This is an amazing piece!
too me the flow, rythmn and ryhme were brillaint

i enjoyed reading it and liked the length. I like poems that tell a story.

keep it up!
5/5 from me

This piece flowed and rhymed perfectly.
Your arrangement is somewhat unique and your choice of terminology, though simple, were effective.
It was a heartbreaking read, more so because it was relatable to some degree.

Excellent. 5/5