Hey Ellie, let me just say it's a great first poem :D you should have seen mine compared haha, this is very good! I give it 4/5, but to improve it, try giving it a little more structure instead of one big stanza. The way you define your stanzas will give the poem a greater emotion behind it I feel.

Is this your cry for help? Is this anger? It has the fluidity to be both but I can't really tell with it being a block, but that's just me! I could be totally wrong, and maybe you lay it out like this just so it can be open to interpretation :)

Well done! :D