Wow - this one's intense! I think the repition in this poem was a great idea - It's kind of like a loop in your mind, that plays over and over again - all the errors you've made and the anger you feel towards yourself and life in general, like you're stuck on replay and you can't get past these emotions! It's very sad! I wonder about the category it's under, like maybe you're broken over the mistakes you've made in the past and how because of them you've lost someone you really loved :( Wow, I can definitely relate to that...ugh

I hate my life, I hate what I've become.
I hate my life, I hate what I've done.
Walking through my memories.
Walking through my dreams.
Smiles that weren't broken.
Dreams that aren't broken.
Hatred is all I feel.
Hatred shows me what is real.
Hatred shows me how to feel.

I really dig that.
I thought this was an awesome poem - raw and emotional!

You should start writing again!

The repetition did you a favor here and did not bring your poem down. The rhymes flowed smoothly and I love the simple word choice.
"Death whispers my name.
Death tells me to play its game.
I'm burning alive.
I'm already dead inside.
Your words have been spoken.
I'm left once again, broken."
---I really love the ending. Though I think this poem should be categorized under sad poems.
Overall, I love this piece. Keep writing :)
-X