Deceptions

Dearest, do you remember me,
Because I remember you,
When all my skies are grey,
And my heart is feeling blue.

The poem defnitely started out sad.... was a sad opening...... &&& I like the tone of it....i like how you used dearest..puts an eerie feeling to the poem somehow..Im a an od dark poetry and when I see one i like it a lot but i loved this one.. so keep on writiging... it was well written and nice rhymes too .....i think it makes it more enjoyable for the reader..... good job on this sad piece....

"The words have all gone blurry,
Or perhaps the problem is in my eyes,
I just can't seem to tell anymore,
The difference between the truth and lies."

oooh I like this stanza, its strong, and the last lines gives it that extra pinch.

"The clouds are turning red,
My vision going black,
Somehow, somewhere you disappeared,
And there's a knife thrust in my back."

I love the visualisation in this part, good play on the words too.

"There's blood splattered on the ground,
And vultures circling overhead,
Something's wrong, my darling,
Don't they only prey upon the dead?"

you know, I was only planning on pointing out a few stanzas that really stood out but there are so many in this piece, and the question you asked at the end of the above stanza is, well, genius. I do like a good dark poem, usually they're all basically the same just with a different topic or worded differently, but this was different all by itself, very good imagery in this. nicely done.

Wow! This is a wonderful poem you did an amazing job!!! Absolutly perfect

That was an amazing poem i felt every word which doesn't come from a good writer it comes from a great one

To be honest it is so great well done