First of all I want to say that I love the message, and it really feels so familiar. I'm going through something like this at the moment so I can really relate. I only gave it a 4/5, because, while it really speaks a lot, it is a bit too "obvious". I'd change the layout a little bit, too, in order to give it a stanza feeling, and since it rhymes a lot, it would really help with the oral reading of it. |
I found it in a picture... |