Your poem rocks bro. The wording is excellent well thought out not just placed for affect. The only part that doesn't seem to fit is:

here is naught left but ruin there.

I'm not sure why but I read it a couple times and I stumble over that line, it's not as smooth and flowing as the rest.

But of course it could be me lol

Excellent poem with images and raw emotions.

I wonder why this poem hasnt gotten the attention it needs..this is a great piece..the wording is brilliant..if i had the powers, i would hav nominated this poem coz it is a winner..5/5

This is amazing. I love how it tells a story that one could follow. I love the wording and the imagery. It's all around just a wonderful poem. Outstanding.

I think there is rawness all over, and the thick imagery used with the line breaks of one line between two stanzas just conveys the message in an eerie way, but 'eerie' is great, in here.

And I think that your deep/fancy words just add to it, it doesn't deduct anything. It's great.

Amazing job, keep that up.

I too agree with the guys above...
these poem though raw, possess emotions and is just fab...!!
I liked it to the extreme...
I would love to read more from you...:))

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This is my favorite from you!