Stuck in a Race

Very good piece,
I liked the metaphors, and the rhymes were nice, sometimes they seemed a little forced as the ending didn't seem right in some way, that last stanza just didn't fit to my eyes

However, I like the tone and the meaning, Money is the centre of much these days with the current financial situation

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I really enjoyed reading this piece. It has some attitude and I like the rhymes and the metaphor you used.

This poem is awesome!

I love the meaning behind this poem. It is so true and I think we've all become like robots trying to make ends meet.

I guess we've all forgotten what's really important in life. You have put that in perspective well in your poem

Money has become our life
Fame has become our best friend
Worried about what to wear
Looking for the next new trend.

But what ever happend
To what really mattered
Back in the day
No one cared to be flattered.

I love these two stanzas. Very powerfull

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