For some reason I just love the flow of this one. In my mind I could say this very clearly. And your use of simple words got the point across very easily. Great job.

This is a marvelous poem; short and simple yet thought provoking. I loved how you used nature to incorporate feelings of love to a beloved. Vivid imagery and the flow is very smooth without any rough slope. Your wordings are so heart rendereing. I'm speechless, splendid piece. ;-)