That was a very heartfelt poem. You have a lot of talent.

I'm sorry for your loss.

great poem, i think that you should take it another step forward... if you want that is... tell about how he died exactly... and put all of your emotions into it and use lots of description so the reader feels what your feeling and sees what your seeing

great poem, i think that you should take it another step forward... if you want that is... tell about how he died exactly... and put all of your emotions into it and use lots of description so the reader feels what your feeling and sees what your seeing