Moving and effective. My only suggestion is that I believe you intended to use the homophone "FAIR", rather than "FARE" at the end ofthe 1st line.

I agree with Rachael on changing "fare" to "fair" because "fare" is like money as in "airplane fare." My other suggestion is whenever you use quotations whether, it's in a poem or a story, you always put the comma or period inside of the quotations, not outside.

5/5

-Heather