Wow that was long! but I really found myself engrossed in it from begining to end.

I loved your use of words like "paradox", "ventilating", ect I can see you took time to think this poem through and not just use any old words

"Here the mortification
manifests itself- I finally
writhe away from the
killers that lay in the cardboard
picture boxes.....
how I've wanted to escape
the temptation to break all your
glass pieces."

^ This my favorite stanza as it all went together so well

Excellent

A really strong poem throughout

5/5