Comments : Zombie [Acrostic]

  • 12 years ago

    by Whatever works

    I love zombie movies

    but this made me sad for them

    hehe.

    but nice description like it 5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    Metaphor for heartbreak?

    "Inanimate heart-beats
    Empty into a grave of blankness"

    Graphic, desolate, morose, perfect!

    Did you deliberately keep this poem to 31 syllables? That's the length of a tanka.

  • 12 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Amazing, such a small verse yet such a very rich one. I am getting used to your style, and falling for it. I love the way you pen down your thoughts, very neat!

    hats off..

  • 12 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Zap! All
    Other emotions have died

    *I'd change "have" to "has"*

    Making this apathetic
    Babble colorless.

    *I love this part!!! :O Great choice of words.*

    Inanimate heart-beats
    Empty into a grave of blankness.

    *Really great poem hun. You captured the word so well and I can really relate to this. Keep it up. -Nik