Comments : Somewhere

  • 12 years ago

    by Liliana

    Thin air
    could blow me
    to dust

    this is so heart-breaking and very emotional but I like it :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Larry Chamberlin

    I like the short lines - they portray the sense of anxiety and diffusion of energy.
    You may want to correct the non-ASCII in the first stanza: heartÂ; also, unless it was deliberate, you might check on
    "Weaker an weaker" Should it be "and"?

    Again, the tension and emotional charge is strong and compliments the substance. Nice work.