Well written bra, i really loved the flow and how you express your emotions. Great work.

Short and straight to the point as to what you're conveying. I like the simplicity in your words, it gave it a smooth flow. However, since this isn't categorized under slangs, i thought you shouldn't abbreviate some few words as you did, like; cos, ain't. It's just my opinion though but apart from that this piece shows how much the subject means to you. Someone so dear to you that you can't do without. Kudos! Keep writing and your talent will blossom as time goes by. Blessings to you. Cheers,

Thanx! I'm just a novice who want to be as good as u guys...