I think this poem is a masterpiece and amazing it was nice workin with u 5/5 :)

I swear it doesn't look like a collab, that means it's perfectly written. Each stanza flowed in sync with the other, and I like how you incorporated the idea of time being the 4th dimension, and all the suspicion.. I can hear the clocks tickling. Great job.

Yeah, it doesn't seem like a collab. I can't distinguish who wrote which part. Well done.

Hmmm..
Your guys poems are different but good :)

Very Good Collab by 2 amazing writers :).

I love how you guys used time to express love. Saying that will you leave me behind dangling in the clutches of time.

You can see the way you used the beaches & the tide vividly.

Great job :)
5/5

A great job with a powerful message.
It flowed so smoothly, and said so much.
Maybe another is in the future for the two of you to do.

Connie

Time does not stop for anyone and what is lost is lost. All we can do is try and learn from our mistake and live each day as it comes..take care.

Time, will it ever turn back
to catch the tide that I missed
the youth that I lost
for my love, that was unrequited

I once heard, time and tide wait for none..

One of ur bst..defo a mp..
Ful points

Time is precious
so much to do
so little time,
in this left over lifetime
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The opening stanza is quite powerful in itself as it opens up a lot of questions - it did for me. It made me want to read more!

I love how you used the analogy of the sun setting with dying - making it sound so beautiful and peaceful.

Time is the 4th dimension
my presence in it, a reality
my past, an illusion
my future, a delusion
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My favourite stanza - loved how you used words like delusion and illusion and reality all in one go to describe the stages of your life

So much to share, but does an angel care?

Would you even come to my rescue
when my heart is ready to stop,
starved of love, not lust
will you deprive me of the breath of life?
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Eeven though you're talking about death - the use of the word Angel can be taken as Angelic or as a woman - lover. I took it as the lover perspective - I love how it can mean both.

I quite enjoyed this poem and think you both did a wonderful job

x

This was a strong poem that was very heartfelt. I was deeply moved by it. The poem as a whole is very emotional and parts of it reminded me of a situation from my past.

"Time, will it ever turn back
to catch the tide that I missed
the youth that I lost
for my love, that was unrequited"

^ My favorite stanza

Well done both this an excellent collab.

5/5

Lovely poem

Time, will it ever turn back
to catch the tide that I missed
the youth that I lost
for my love, that was unrequited

my fav line, i really enjoyed this poem.
we all fall victim to time in one way or another, bad thing is we cant get it back so its how we use it when we have it that should matter.

Good write. it is very true life is precious do not waste it... great 5/5

Time...time...is life! What a lovely subject..time controls our life..its the only thing we can hear..tick..tock and only thing we can see with seasons that pass by...its a lovely write enjoyed it

I Loved this.

This was really awesome.