Lifeless

by Areeba   Dec 13, 2011


Who cares if I am broken?
Who thinks of me when I feel shattered?
Who gives a damn if I feel lonely?
Who loves me when I feel like ms. nobody?

There's no one whom I call mine
I too got a heart which needs love, affection and care
But there's no one who bother to look at me
Everyone in this world is such a liar and a player

Why should I live?
Why should I take breathe and stay alive?
Is someone there who is able to clarify?
Is someone there who can answer me this bloody 'why'?

Nothing is worth to live
I am crying for something which was never mine
I belong to no one and No one belong to me
There's nothing beautiful in my life not even beauty's sign

They say someday you will definitely find a perfect guy
But now I think let it be the way it is
Because now I've found my way
And that's suicide...yeah, Suicide is my way

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This is my second poem
If you like it plz rate and comment
Thanks
-Areeba Siddqiui

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  • 12 years ago

    by Jawwad Zafar

    Oh wow areeba, you write really good..
    Keep it up :)

    P.S i'm impressed :p

  • 12 years ago

    by Omar

    Wow this poem is just amazing. You put a lot of emotion in to this poem great job.

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    Okay, contrasting to the first poem I read from you, this has a punch of emotion to it. There are some very cliche and over-used words here, and widening your lexis would help, but as a poem to release all your pain and hurt, this is quite good.
    "I too got a heart which needs love, affection
    and care"
    ---This part is very relatable and stands out in the poem. It really gives the reader a sense of feeling what the persona is going through.
    "But there's no one who bother to look at me"
    ---eradicate 'there's' and 'who' and change 'bother' to bothers..
    ---this is not true. I've felt this before, one way or another, it just seems like no one cares and no one notices you, but with time, you'll start to notice who cares for you.
    "Why should I take breathe and stay alive?"
    ---eradicate 'take'
    "Nothing is worth to live"
    ---consider revising this.
    "I belong to no one and No one belong to
    me"
    ---i agree with Mery, this is a powerful line. But this is not true. Let time heal your pain right now, and soon time will bring you 'your' special someone. Someone whom you care and love and someone who cares and loves you. You're still young. Enjoy being 'single'. When you enter in a relationship, no matter if it is serious or not, there is committment, and a little less freedom. So don't commit suicide just because you haven't found 'him' yet. He may be looking for you too.
    Keep your head high and enjoy life 'cause it's short. If you kill yourself, you're not the only one you're killing. Think about your family, friends...
    -X

  • 12 years ago

    by Yrem Crish

    Your piece is very emotional and powerful...i like this line..
    >I belong to no one and No one belong to me
    wow! It's very meaningful and catch my attention to this tagged line..." I belong to no one and no one belong to me.."brilliant idea to write this...i love to read again and again..but, don't lost hope sweetie",suicide is not a good and wise idea to end up your lonely life..widen your mind and look around you there are beautiful things in life, all you need is to be positive...every little things in this world is worthful and significant...you have one life and must live to the fullest...there are many people surround you that loves you..maybe, you don't notice it..but try to be open...i know you are a lovely person...don't take negative things to be negative...just turns it into positive..learned from things surround you and you will realized it is worth to live...hope this message will help you..god will bless you always and good luck..stay cool",

    From,
    Mery:=)

  • 12 years ago

    by Akerele1 Segun22

    This is a well penned sardonic poem.The feeling is beautifully expressed. But don't do anything that you will later regret,god is your solace.Remain blessed.