I think that this is quite interestingly written, especially the beginning of the poem pulled me in. I absolutely agree to the message you convey that fear shouldn't take over and control us and our life.

Thanks once again

'..he never risked, he never tried'_my indisputably FAVOURITE line. And Yes!, a fearful soul is always a failure.. Worthy piece, properly noted.. So grateful u shared bro! Ride on..

And when one day he passed away,
his insurance was denied;
for since he never really lived,
they claimed he never died!'

^^^WOW, Perfection! :)

This Poem Is Sad And Inspiring. I Love It.
Beautiful Piece. !

Thanks

Interesting poem, and I love your message that you conveyed through your words. I love how you told a story with this poem, and it wasn't just about fear itself. The second stanza was really well-written, I like this part: "for since he never really lived,
they claimed he never died!" it reminded me of a part from a song that is like "everybody dies but not everybody lives" which has a similar meaning!

Great poem :)

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Great piece Kips. The message is awesome.

It is great man i like it
im good in hatred and revenge poems

I loved this stanza:

And when one day he passed away,
his insurance was denied;
for since he never really lived,
they claimed he never died!'

Very nice poem :)

Thanks.

What a profound message. I better get to doing some living! thanks for posting

Welcome.

I really love the message here.
This piece reminds me of a saying which goes like: "If you live in fear, you aren't living at all" or something like that.
"There was a very cautious man,
he never laughed or played;
he never risked, he never tried,
he never sang or prayed."
---I like the story-telling theme you have here, and the rhymes flowed smoothly, plus it fits the atmosphere your poem has. Nice..
"And when one day he passed away,
his insurance was denied;
for since he never really lived,
they claimed he never died!'"
---Creepy and suspenseful. Definitely my favorite stanza!
"The failure rate of human
is one hundred percent,"
---it's not really one hundred percent.. I don't know. But you may be right..
"and everyone with you included
qualifies for membership in this club."
---When you stopped rhyming, it became incoherent. Or is it just me? lol. What club? The human race? Membership? Usually, when I read a rhyming poem, the rhymes takes away the clarity, when they stop rhyming, it was coherent, yours was the other way around.
"The fact is, we all fail!
But that doesn't mean you
have to live in the fear of failure."
---Great message. The transition from third to second person went smoothly.
I won't pick out the rest line by line, because there's nothing I can suggest to make it better. I love the message and word choice. Great job
-X

Well i like this poem alot
i think the main idea here
is something about living in fear is not the way you were meant to live
and fears existed to be run over not to live inside them and shell our selves cause we are afraid of death or afraid to fail or fear of anything

pretty nice idea and very very nice poetry

love it
5/5 keep writing =)

Xanthe, ""The failure rate of human
is one hundred percent," simply indicates the fact that no one is perfect. Yes, I'm sure that many people have different view success and failure, but the truth is at one time or another each of us have failed.

The membership I was talking about refers as well to the failure rate. If it's 100%, then no one is excluded.

I hope this gives more sense to the piece.

^^I love the story here very meaningful and full of lessons...yeah, I agree with you kips...in some instances people just live in this world without knowing what the real essence of life...everyday walking in the streets, busy minds and sometimes looking in the ere and asked "who I am? What is my real mission in this world? Why I was born?"There are people living dead! Well, it seems very dramatic here...hehe,lol",

Failure is the twin of life and because of failure we know more about our self.....there are people who afraid to be fall--because they are afraid and anticipating when failures come they can never stand up again...I believe in the saying that " You can not reach the cliff of success without passing the road of failures" and " you are the driver of your own destiny, your guidance is God". If we truly have faith in God, we never be fear because He always there to guide us....God is like an instructor...sometimes He is silent in your life, you are being tested.. He will give the right answers of your questions later. If you passed there's a reward and if you failed there's learning...Challenges makes you more responsible. Remember that life without struggle is a life without success. Don't give up and learn not to quit because of that "fear"...Fear should not control you but rather you must control it....Over all your poem is great and amazingly written. Keep always writing more amazing poems:)
You deserve of 5/5-C

That's for that expository comment. I learned from it.

I really enjoyed this poem, it spoke to me in so many ways and I think that should be one of those goals to keep in mind.

I really enjoyed this poem, it spoke to me in so many ways and I think that should be one of those goals to keep in mind.