by Lostlove1
Pssst. |
by East Poetry
Lol thx |
by Lostlove1
Perfect!!!! |
by L
This is a great piece. Its is true eventually will understand its meaning unfortunately for some it takes more time than for others. |
by Britt
I think this is a great tanka, definitely has a wise message here. The only thing I could suggest doing is not making each line a capitalized letter. With capitalizing each line it makes it feel like the line before should've had a different stop, and for me breaks up the flow a little bit. |
All i can say is this is a masterpiece. its short and simple but straight to the point and it hits hard. This was great:) 5/5 no doubt |
by Mello193
Nice haiku man. i myself suck at writing these so the fact that you can do it at all is impressive to me. great job |
by Lofallenve
Short, but precious. |
by Xanthe
The title drew me in as it was very simple, like most of Stephen King's novels lol. I like it. The message, as already stated is beautifully delivered. Also, I agree that the first letters should not be capitalized because it ruins the flow a bit and it is distracting, esp for a reader like me. At first read, I thought 'eventually' did not have the adequate amount of syllables needed for this form, but when read in a certain way, it has five syllables. Still, that part is a little disturbing for me, but it works. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this tanka. The subtle rhyme of 'fleeting' and 'meaning' gave this poem a kick. Great job. Five from me :) Keep writing |