Comments : The Meaning

  • 12 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Pssst.
    Oops line 4,
    (easy fix)
    With an open mind,

    Add 2 syllables Randy, Loved your first Tanka.
    Keep goin-
    Lostlove

  • 12 years ago

    by East Poetry

    Lol thx

  • 12 years ago

    by Lostlove1

    Perfect!!!!

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    This is a great piece. Its is true eventually will understand its meaning unfortunately for some it takes more time than for others.

  • 12 years ago

    by Britt

    I think this is a great tanka, definitely has a wise message here. The only thing I could suggest doing is not making each line a capitalized letter. With capitalizing each line it makes it feel like the line before should've had a different stop, and for me breaks up the flow a little bit.

    Other than that, I think this is absolutely fantastic :)

  • 12 years ago

    by Marino Vilano

    All i can say is this is a masterpiece. its short and simple but straight to the point and it hits hard. This was great:) 5/5 no doubt

  • 12 years ago

    by Mello193

    Nice haiku man. i myself suck at writing these so the fact that you can do it at all is impressive to me. great job

  • 12 years ago

    by Lofallenve

    Short, but precious.
    Your lines speak such a volume of words. :)
    5/5

  • 12 years ago

    by Xanthe

    The title drew me in as it was very simple, like most of Stephen King's novels lol. I like it. The message, as already stated is beautifully delivered. Also, I agree that the first letters should not be capitalized because it ruins the flow a bit and it is distracting, esp for a reader like me. At first read, I thought 'eventually' did not have the adequate amount of syllables needed for this form, but when read in a certain way, it has five syllables. Still, that part is a little disturbing for me, but it works. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this tanka. The subtle rhyme of 'fleeting' and 'meaning' gave this poem a kick. Great job. Five from me :) Keep writing
    -X