Of All The Things You Could Be

I love what you have written here.

The man behaving like the moon. Not always around but also the moon controls the tides - I keep thinking he controls you and your emotions.

but I keep falling, like a crazed star
before that crescent smile
and it feels far too nauseating
to be carelessly casted
as naught
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I love the last stanza - to say that he treats you like you are nothing. Amazingly written.

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This was definitely different and creative. Smooth easy flow, creative wording , touched in wisdom. Enjoyed this very much

I respect your creativity,, I love your originality, I appreciate your poetry.

I would ask Janis to have a front page, only for the poems you write.

Hats off, again, Melissa.

"It's no mystery loving a man
who behaves like the moon,"

Ohhhh wow. The moon is always there, but distant in the day time, and so strong and bright in the night time. I instantly laughed because I thought of a booty call, but I feel there is just so much more to the story than this. How two lines can make me think so much...wow.

Your couplet there just breaks my heart. The ever knowing player, he can charm the pants right off of anyone.

I like how you kept up with the metaphor of moon/stars, but did it in such a different way, it wasn't cliche to me at all. Your ending added a bit of humor but also so much realism to the piece. Wonderfully done and nominated. :)