The Operation

TJ, I loved this. I imagined cupid as the surgeon, implanting us with the hope of love but only leaving us empty in the end. You expressed yourself beautifully here and I could really feel the sadness in your words. I really enjoyed the style because the flow was flawless and it was fun to read...although the topic was a heartbreaking one. I am sure many can relate with your words. I liked how varied your vocabulary was and that you didn't overdo it with "big words"

Nicely done!

Wow, TJ, this is a different kind of poem than what you usually write about. I liked the creativity and uniqueness of this poem, it was different and interesting. I was engaged from the beginning until the end. I really like how you compared these emotions to a surgery, but most importantly how love can be like a surgery, since you never know if you will come out healthier and better or worse... and you showed the sadness part and the worst case scenario in this poem... it was sad, but very well-written. I'm glad Abed challenged you!

Well done my friend :)

What an amazing write, I honestly felt the cold continue on at the end of the poem. The thought that came to me throughout the piece was "numbing". The words you used were so precise and embedded a clear, sharp image in my mind. Did not expect the images and the feeling that came- a heart dissected, hope drawn out. It's like you are finally at the point where you find out who this person is, how susceptible and vulnerable your heart is, and it makes for one good sad poem. You need to take up more challenges definitely :)

Take care
MaryAnne

Your words flow so smoothly together, that was a touching poem. 5/5

mandy :)

Anesthetic kisses
lulled me into complacency.
Numb to the anguish
soon to come.

As soons as I started reading this stanza, My mind just picture a breakup. And as I kept reading that's what stayed in my mind. Well done. I really enjoyed reading it. Its an awesome idea.