It is sad and the feeling that is most compelling to me is one of coldness like the surgeon wielding the scalpel you write off. Some people are that cold unfortunately that does destroy the love between them. Well done.

With the skill of a surgeon
wielding a feather edge scalpel
the operation began.

^ The title almost distracted me from this awesome piece.

I love how the author has mentioned his partner to possess the skills of a surgeon, capable of performing an operation/surgery. The partner has a feather edge scalpel, that she starts to use to hollow out the author.

Feather edge scalpel - is very creative.

Anesthetic kisses
lulled me into complacency.
Numb to the anguish
soon to come.

^ Anesthetic kisses could indicate, that her kisses are so seductive that it puts the author to sleep. But it could also mean that, her kisses are so destructive that it throws the author into a state of coma.

But as per the further stanza, her kisses bring satisfaction to the author, till then. For the author is unware of her true nature.

The state of complacency has made the author helpless, as he cannot predict/detect or foresee the imminent betrayal.

Sterilized surrounding
void of passion. I lay
overt and unsuspecting,

^ Ah, such a beautiful stanza. Sterilized surrounding states that the female partner, is devoid of emotions and lust towards the author, while the author is blind to it.

I find this stanza to be absolutely beautiful.

A persona decorated in counterfeit
desires, erased caution.
Changing the fragrance
of risk to solace.

^ This stanza in particular suggests, that the author let his guard down and let the female within his vicinity. Although he is unaware that she is only deceiving him, and her sensual behavior is an alibi for hurting the author. What the author perceived as solace was in turn a huge leap of faith/risk.

Operation complete:

Heart dissected , leaving
an empty vessel
once filled with hope,

^ The author here, is left devastated, for in his heart, is a void/cavity, an incision made, that has left him hollow. Where once resided and bloomed hope, now dwells a valley barren.

Shattered dreams and ashes
of infinity lay upon the ground
decomposing in the light
of deception.

^ Damn, this one is nice

The dreams are shattered like a glass maze. And the ashes of trust and love, divinity, lay on the ground rotting and eventually decomposing, in the light of deceit.

And the surgeon moves on.

^ Crushing the heart beneath her feet, she moves on, and the author is left an empty shell, or a hollow statue. Numb and lonely.

Dude, this is an exquisite piece. Even though the theme/plot of the poem is common, the comparison of the female character to a surgeon, performing a surgery thus the female carving out the heart of author, is marvelous.

Very creative bro.

Great challenge it's amazingly done,,very sad and hurtful and so much more it's fantastic of course a great poet like u can write great with anything that comes ur way,,it's wonderfully magnificently fantastic terrifically written and worded just right perfect flow it was amazing I loved everything 5/5

I think you met the challenge with bells on LOl. It was a deep intense poem, one of not only sadness but physical and mental torture.

Connie

You have really aced the challenge,,, I'll see what I can do to beat you.. lol kidding!!

I really love the descriptions, some of great words (lull - anesthetic kisses...); they moved me, for they sound so alive, and it feels that I can hear the heart beats, so fast. This reminds me of something I'll try to imitate too in this challenge ;)

But for you, Hats-Off!

I think that you might want to think about a more creative title, it fits to the content, but it's not all that eye-catching to be honest.
I think that you deinftaley nailed this, I like the atmosphere you create with your words and the vividniss of the picture you paint. The fact that you allow the protagonist to speak for himself makes this poem so much more personal and very touching too. Calling the woman surgeon shows the distance that grew between the two and it almost feels like it'd be all she does.
You obviously did a good job! :)

To have someone cut your heart out, while you stand before them with your arms wide open, is the most painful of events, TJ.

You wrote this down in such a way it makes clear just how much of an impact a break up between lovers can have on one who loves with all his heart.

You deserve a true love, hun, I hope you will find her and that you will have all, just like I once wrote in that one poem for you:)

5/5 Ingrid

I definitley think that you lived up to the challenge, this was sad and heartbreaking. I loved this idea for a poem. I never read anything ilke it before - was creative. your word choice was really effective. I love it nice job TJ 5/5

I absolutely love this poem!

The use of the words and imagery here is wonderful.

The way you compared a surgeon to your lover was well thought of. I say this because there is such delicacy in both.

Here we have an actual surgeon who has your heart in their hands and can destroy it at any time. And then you have the person in your life - your lover who also has your heart in their hand and can also destroy it instantly (and does by the end of the poem)

Anesthetic kisses
lulled me into complacency.
Numb to the anguish
soon to come.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Eventually the anasthetic wears off and you end up feeling nothing but pain. You find out what kind of person they really are as well.

I love this!!!

"Anesthetic kisses
lulled me into complacency.
Numb to the anguish
soon to come."

Love this stanza so much, sorry this is a late comment; I voted early on, but my phone and I were arguing when I read it on my android. So I had to write my comment now. :D

Beautifully written piece and the flow was amazing.

My Lord, I bow to you.Great piece. Bravo!

Anesthetic kisses
lulled me into complacency.
Numb to the anguish
soon to come.

As soons as I started reading this stanza, My mind just picture a breakup. And as I kept reading that's what stayed in my mind. Well done. I really enjoyed reading it. Its an awesome idea.

Your words flow so smoothly together, that was a touching poem. 5/5

mandy :)

What an amazing write, I honestly felt the cold continue on at the end of the poem. The thought that came to me throughout the piece was "numbing". The words you used were so precise and embedded a clear, sharp image in my mind. Did not expect the images and the feeling that came- a heart dissected, hope drawn out. It's like you are finally at the point where you find out who this person is, how susceptible and vulnerable your heart is, and it makes for one good sad poem. You need to take up more challenges definitely :)

Take care
MaryAnne

Wow, TJ, this is a different kind of poem than what you usually write about. I liked the creativity and uniqueness of this poem, it was different and interesting. I was engaged from the beginning until the end. I really like how you compared these emotions to a surgery, but most importantly how love can be like a surgery, since you never know if you will come out healthier and better or worse... and you showed the sadness part and the worst case scenario in this poem... it was sad, but very well-written. I'm glad Abed challenged you!

Well done my friend :)

TJ, I loved this. I imagined cupid as the surgeon, implanting us with the hope of love but only leaving us empty in the end. You expressed yourself beautifully here and I could really feel the sadness in your words. I really enjoyed the style because the flow was flawless and it was fun to read...although the topic was a heartbreaking one. I am sure many can relate with your words. I liked how varied your vocabulary was and that you didn't overdo it with "big words"

Nicely done!