Always you.

by Yakari Gabriel   Dec 21, 2011


I often scribble your
name on paper,
although I know
a thousand other people..

its always you.

you are placed in
my thoughts like moisturizer
on skin -

making me softer.

my heart is your
home most definitely.

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  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Awww.. this poem is simple, so sweet, so meaningful, and I loved every word.

    I loved the beginning... scribbling this person's name, even though you know so many people, this person is who you love and care about the most...

    I loved the comparison to moisturizer on skin, that was really interesting, not something you'd expect in a love poem!

    And I love the ending - simply perfect! I love how you wrote "my heart is your home most definitely"

    Beautiful love poem! Well done! =D

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    I agree with Ruby Red Memories on the Title, It didn't draw me in like it could have done,

    However the poem was flawless, the flow was brilliant and you definately have a way of making the reader feel, and I can relate to this, which is awesome

    Really nice piece
    Love
    Tara
    xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by L

    You are placed in
    my thoughts like moisturizer
    on skin -

    making me softer.

    --- This sentence is amazing.. Specially to those type of people who have a really dry skin.. the moisturizer that makes their skin softer.. and thus their character.

    Its a short and enjoyable piece with a clear message. Love for someone.

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    The words you say really do express how someone is feeling about someone else. The poem is short but not much is actually needed to say because the words said are strong enough

    The first stanza makes me think of how many times I've scribbled down names of guys I like on paper (mainly when I was younger of course)

    You then tend to add the "Mrs" just before their names to see what that feels like

    I love the use of the moisturizer describing their effect on you. Making you all soft (and gooey inside) LOVED IT

    A well written poem!

  • 12 years ago

    by Jenna Bella Oldridge

    You really do have a way with words don't you?

    Yet again I have been moved by your words. It made me think of childhood crushes. You really know how to connect with the reader.

    My only ciritque would be to change your title because even though it does suit the poem after I read it, it didn't exactly draw me in by just glancing at it to begin with.

    5/5

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