Just curious to get d depth of it all.. Well, in the uncertainty, I'ld leave it a Big 5 hit! Nicely rhymed. Thank u 4 shar'n.

You did a great job painting a picture of your heart. However, you didn't really do well in putting some poetic touches on the whole thing.

The repeated "a part of me" is not (really) necessary, you could make it even better poetically by doing this:

A part of me
wants to let go.....
wants to stay with you...
wants to etc..

Something like that would make it poetic without the repetition, and it will definitely make the poem smoother.

In the third part (or so), you changed the tone of your voice, from 'you' to 'him, & he'. You need to choose one particular tone and follow with it to the end, else it will throw most people off. Following it to the end, will definitely make the poem stronger.

These are just few suggestions I have for you. You may look into them if you wish to.

Overall, your heart was very well painted. Keep writing and keep on improving.

5/5 from me!!

I thought the repetition was effective, it may have been a bit too much and if you wanted to add variety you could have expanded on your descriptions has to why you want to let him go, yet stay with him. I loved the rawness of this piece and how you don't butter anything up, you tell it how it is, that you are confused and there are moments when you are ready to leave, yet something is drawing you back to him. Great title that just says it all- keep writing. :)

I love it great job keep your heart in your works cause their great 5

Wow!! this left me speechless :] its so sad but at the same time i love it<33
you definately poured your heart out on this one :]]

5/5