Every Opened Door

This was a beautiful poem before you changed it...but, I hope you agree it reads better now. Some people take offence when I suggest changes...this is the second time you have actually taken them on board....you have talent...that is very obvious to me...keep with it...you can only get better!

How much more do I have
to miss you in order for you
to show up? Has it crossed
your mind that I maybe standing
out there? Maybe in a bus stop;
or perhaps a train station.

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I'd like you to check this with someone else but I think the first maybe should be may be...two words?

I even tripped myself; fell down
on my knees, only hoping that you
would come running to hold me.
Now I only carry those bruises
around, I don't think there is an
empty spot for a new fall.

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This tells me how sad and hurt you feel by this person's departure and you are finding it hard to come to terms with it.

And when it rained, I intentionally
forget my umbrella and walk down
the street to knock on your door,
wishing you'll open up and take me
in your arms. Instead I walk slowly
back dragging a fever with me.

In the first line it should be rains instead of rained which is past tense and I think wishing should be hoping. I loved the thought of dragging a fever along with you...very unique.

Where else should I go? Or what
else should I do? I think I have done
it all for you. Still, I stand out there
in another bus stop; or perhaps a
train station, waiting for you to step
out from every opened door.

Again..not 100% sure but I think it should be open not opened...if I'm correct you'll have to change the wording in the title too.

These are just small errors and I'm pointing them out because I can see you have a lot of talent. Really enjoyed this one from you!

I love the story you told in this poem. I was captivated from beginning to end, and really envisioned and felt your words. I LOVE the ending!! I love how you as this person try so hard, and do whatever to see or please someone, but it's still not enough... It was a really delight to read! :)

Mind blowing
out of proportion on how good this poem is
very sophisticated, you surprised me dearly <3

I love this poem!

Such heartache emotions written and easy for the readers to relate to

It is amazing what we would do in life - to ourselves to be with the ones we love. It reminds me of one of my quotes

Sometimes I would make myself fall to see if you would pick me up!

Well done

x