Awww...that was really amazing write of yours...i simply loved it.... how eagerly one hopes for their special ones to come and hold and all they get to hold is disappointment ...... perfect 5/5 :)

Thisis a very special well written poem and I hope the one that inspired it reads it

Amazing... style.. emotions, and sadness. combined in this poem... that makes it best..and i love this poem because few stanza relates to me... very true love feelings.... sad poem indeed

I love this poem!

Such heartache emotions written and easy for the readers to relate to

It is amazing what we would do in life - to ourselves to be with the ones we love. It reminds me of one of my quotes

Sometimes I would make myself fall to see if you would pick me up!

Well done

x

Mind blowing
out of proportion on how good this poem is
very sophisticated, you surprised me dearly <3

I love the story you told in this poem. I was captivated from beginning to end, and really envisioned and felt your words. I LOVE the ending!! I love how you as this person try so hard, and do whatever to see or please someone, but it's still not enough... It was a really delight to read! :)

How much more do I have
to miss you in order for you
to show up? Has it crossed
your mind that I maybe standing
out there? Maybe in a bus stop;
or perhaps a train station.

^^^^^^

I'd like you to check this with someone else but I think the first maybe should be may be...two words?

I even tripped myself; fell down
on my knees, only hoping that you
would come running to hold me.
Now I only carry those bruises
around, I don't think there is an
empty spot for a new fall.

^^^^

This tells me how sad and hurt you feel by this person's departure and you are finding it hard to come to terms with it.

And when it rained, I intentionally
forget my umbrella and walk down
the street to knock on your door,
wishing you'll open up and take me
in your arms. Instead I walk slowly
back dragging a fever with me.

In the first line it should be rains instead of rained which is past tense and I think wishing should be hoping. I loved the thought of dragging a fever along with you...very unique.

Where else should I go? Or what
else should I do? I think I have done
it all for you. Still, I stand out there
in another bus stop; or perhaps a
train station, waiting for you to step
out from every opened door.

Again..not 100% sure but I think it should be open not opened...if I'm correct you'll have to change the wording in the title too.

These are just small errors and I'm pointing them out because I can see you have a lot of talent. Really enjoyed this one from you!

This was a beautiful poem before you changed it...but, I hope you agree it reads better now. Some people take offence when I suggest changes...this is the second time you have actually taken them on board....you have talent...that is very obvious to me...keep with it...you can only get better!