This poem is great but uhhmm... are you allright?

If its just a poem then I have to say that I cannot find anything wrong with it. I really like it but I hope you don't feel like this.

This poem has a consistent flow, not only because of the amount of syllables in each verse, but also because of the rhymes, which makes reading it very easy. I just think that in the sixth stanza it gets interrupted. Your words also picture a vivid image, which seems to get completed as the reader continues to go through this poem. The two questions are thought-provoking, but the answer seems to be obvious after reading the poem. The emotions are really strong and captivating.

Also you've got a typo in the last stanza, "disapoint" should be "disappoint".

I hope that this is only a poem.

This piece is amazing. you really have penned a remarkable piece. The word choice is stunning and the emotion is so clear. And I love this piece so much.

Hope all is okay and this was just fiction :)

I thought the flow was good and the rhymes fit well, the descriptions and thoughts, feelings and emotions all fit together very well
The vividness was awesome,
great piece

This poemis very sad but there is also such darkness in this poem it could have been put in that category.

The poem itself is well written and the first and last stanza are really strong.

I always love your writings!

I do hope that you are ok xoxoxo

One has to have faith in himself. Maybe all the circumstances occurring can drive him desperate... but... I believe there comes a time when you'd overcome yourself. I love the deepness in here.

I like this. It's different and describes depression right down to the point. I like your wording and the simplicity of it all. Love it.

Dani
xox

Dnt knw abt othrs,bt i js lvd it..i mean frm flow to emotions..js prfct

I would love for you to read your poem on my radio show by phone. If interested email me, thanks !