This poem sure does take me back to my childhood days of making Oragami

I love the way that you showed us the transition while she was making the Oragami to when she was finished - a completely new person who's mind has opened up.

I like that you have given the description at the end of the poem which tells us the benefits of Oragami and what therapy it can be used for.

The meaning behind this poem is awesome.

Well written

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I'm out of words.
I don't know..... I swear I see myself in most of your poems. And this piece, it's definitely worth a front page. I envy you, I really do. You're the only one here whose words drip with maturity, general knowledge, soul and gleam.

I always feel at ease when I read your work, and this, thanks for the infromation, it was so realistic, dark at places, where tense was built 'folding and folding' and also the word 'again'... those reflect on the problem the patient is having.

And at the end, you took my breath away with that image......

Chapeaux-Bas Karla.

Good luck in the contest Karla. I loved this piece from you!

What a creative and explosive, powerful piece... I do love short pieces... the message is beyond explosive...well done~

This is very very very beautiful,I'm touched.

Your originality is brilliant.
This had a gentle touch , a peaceful message that had a smooth easy flow. Enjoyed it very much dear Karla

Hey if this counts for anything
then this has got to be one of my favorite reads by far for quite a while
i'm deeply impressed with the message you displayed, very creative ,

This poem is very moving and true I never folded origami but I have seen it done and it looks beautiful as well. keep up the good work.

This is a very inspirational poem and conveys a lot of meaning in a short write.

I have three minor suggestions:
I would delete the words, "to make a crease"
because it is not essential to the poem and disrupts the flow, imo.

"when the bird was completely folded"
doesn't make much sense, since the paper is folded into a bird. Perhaps, "when the paper had transformed into a bird"

Also "it was her who could finally fly"
is grammatically incorrect."

Should be: "it was she who could finally fly."

Overall, a very nice write!!

I like this short and insightful poem. Much depth in the words. I may have to come back later to make an attempt.

First of all, I LOVE ORIGAMI:)

The idea of this poem is AMAZING:)
5/5