Vanishing Moonbeams

Stunning!!! The title was eye catching the beginning was a great hook. The word choice was just wow and the images you created are so vivid. I love this piece and could go on and on about it forever yet never find any flaws. This is going on my favorites list just to show that the techniques here are mazing and this piece is that awesome!

A dark one, from dark times, it seems. "Light and love"...can be found again, we just have to be patient, for them to find us.
Until then the "Shield of optimism" needs to be reinforced with steel and concrete, not to be drawn down.
"Leaving a charcoal smudge of meaningless yesterday"
I think the stain, to a loving heart, will be erased one day, the day love and inspiration finds us again.
A thoughtful and deep verse written from a damaged heart, could definitel use a new mechanic!

WOW WOW WOW, TJ!

The descriptions are way beyond one's imagination. The palette of their empowering density is diverse, I was totally enticed into the atmosphere.. how sad it felt, I felt so weak, too.. as if every word had its peculiar effect on me.

Wow, this was a really deep and sad poem! The title caught my eye, and the way you described these emotions was original and interesting. The opening stanza made me feel the inevitable growing pain of something you can't escape.

I love this line: "Leaving a charcoal smudge of meaningless yesterday" -- I love your wording, and the best phrase of this line was 'meaningless yesterday'

The ending was really powerful... I love the last three lines:

When it no longer exist, you fade
into nothingness of someone else's
nightmare

-- I like the idea of fading into nothingness, as if your life has no meaning and no one will notice when you're gone...

Really touching poem. Great job!

TJ, this is just more proof of your ability to write. There isn't much left to say but agree with all the other commenters. You did good, ST.