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  • 12 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    I love this piece because you are so strong in the end. I liked the imagery of "tearing down the walls"- you are now standing against it and you leave the reader feeling determined, and also encouraged.

    "No longer will I allow you into my mind
    and if I have to, I'll take a knife to cut you from my heart
    I'll delete texts, throw out gifts, burn all those pictures
    For not the slightest trace of you shall ever remain"

    - This was such a raw and honest stanza. I loved it because you know you gotta be strong here and you are not giving up. You will move on, you will forget his memory and not be affected by it anymore. I feel like there is some trace of hope and that over time you can rebuild that trust, though you were hurt deeply.

    Excellent emotion and a great read.
    Keep writing!

  • 12 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    This is one the heaviest poem i came acroos. Very strong and harsh words.

    Just loved these lines:

    trusted you implicitly, shame on me
    for you're as honest as an addict in withdrawal

    Awesome write.

    all the best and take care