Oh you are so welcome!!! I am excited to read this lovely gem of a poem!! I do love the ghazal form and you penned it with such beauty and elegance... well done!!

That is creative!!

the GHAZAL first originates from the Jahileya Era in the Arab world (before Islamic Era).. It's an arabic word about love.. romance... it can be about explicit love (.. OR soulful love (pain...torment).

Mostly, it is written according to meters called (Bahr, singular... Bohour, plural). there are 16 bohour in poetry (as I still remember) and each one has different meters. And the verse in such poems is made up of two parts: Al Sadr (1st part) .. and Al Ajz (2nd part). the final letter in the 2nd part is called Al Rawey.

The two verses are metered according to pronunciation.. not according to syllables. It's hard to explain because no language has it the same..

---- Larry, I like the content a lot.

Woooow Larry!! You gave the style justice by this piece. Flows in an amazing way, and the wording is perfect :)

"Ghazal" is one of the most known Arabic poetry styles, used alot by Arabic poets.

Larry,
This is such a deep and beautiful poem, the longing for someone you can not have. Each line is alive with emotion as I read...

Blissful hours yearning for your sweet voice in melody
ears turn to your bower for the sound of glee tomorrow.

^^^A poet?

Don't cast me away for sake of that ancient Sade marquis
hands of ice and tongue shall cut you ill foresee tomorrow

^^^She belongs to someone else?...

I could go on and on. The form itself looks tricky and intimidating to me..But You have done it beautifully.

Write On Larry!

You really nailed one of the most difficult forms out there, and you did it using some outstanding language. This has a real authentic feel to it... and the whole poem exudes agony and desperation.

I just noticed a possible minor error in form, in that I was under the impression you had to work your pen name "into" the last line, rather than tacking it on at the end.

But either way, you did an admirable job here.

Thanks!
Some of the literature is vague on whether the name is placed at the end or included. The sources I read cite Agha Shahid Ali as the modern master so I followed his form as to name placement.

How's this for an ending?

Please beguile the world anew, stroll in your garden nightly
and the Godfather shall slink in your alley tomorrow.

Good one ;-)

Love it larry my only criticism is that it is melodramatic ovet the top

What a wonderful read....love the style!!! Thank you

I've tired to write a ghazal many times but for
some reason am not successful and admire those
who do it so well. Liked the read and the emotions this poem brings out...nice!

Ugh.....Larry......i can see why people call you Sir.....it is a sign of respect ....one that has to be earn't......i love this write just amazing.....Sir.