I really like the idea behind this poem, a cry for help writen in your own way, with unique words good job 5/5

Beautiful!!

You did a good job of giving a voice to the earth if only we humans will listen to that voice. It is the only earth we have and we have a responsibility to take care of it.

Brilliantly written as always, TJ.

5/5

-Heather

I soooooooooooooo love this!!!

I love the idea that you are writing a poem from the Earth's prespective. I think it is a great idea for a poem

I believe it can really make people think about what we are doing to our environment.

You mention in the poem that it is getting hotter which clearly shows signs of global warming

I love how you put sincerely the earth after each stanza. Repeating the words s if they were prayers trying to get your point across

Well done

x

At first I thought that the first verse was just a note, but you'd never write it as a note and I soon realized that it was a part of the poem refering to its content. I like your choice of words, they fit very well and describe the current situation well too. The tone of the speaker(in this case the Earth) seems low and one could almost say as if begging for help, which underlines how important it is to change something. Well written! :)

I like how you wrote this. It was clever to use a letter format. I think you done a really good job with this piece as its made a brilliant read.

5/5

Oh wow! I hate nature poems, but when I saw this had many comments I thought well it must be good and it definitely was! ...This was very creative!! I loved your idea for writing this poem..It truly has a sad tone to it because the Earth really does need help surviving with as much pollution and natural disasters that have happened. Great write!

Thank you TJ for this great move that few think of attempting to create.. You have brought to our over-taken eyes a big issue which we seem to forget or ignore. Mother Earth...

great poem, indeed. It reminds me of the song EARTH SONG which is very sad, but yours felt more poetic. I like how Earth is speaking in here, it would make people more aware.

Great piece :)

I have read this poem before and I like the message as much as I did then:)

Indeed only we can save her, but will we?

Well done,

5/5 Ingrid

This message certainly hits my heart- I love how you were the voice of the earth, and you gave motives for us to continue to save the earth. She has provided for us, and is a loving foundation in this creation- we have it in the power of our hands to try as best to protect her......it's all up to what we choose, the path we will strive for. A striking cry out- great work!

Wow this is amazing an that's all I can really say cuz it's great and fantastic and wow and at first I didn't take it as thee earth slowly dying but probably should have with the title but the end summed it up for me and it's just greatly written by an amazing poet so what u write is always amazing 5/5

The reader can truly feel your passion for wanting to save the planet, and the imagery is very nice.

I have a couple of suggestions: Instead of referring to "global warming" in the body of the poem, I would make that the title and let the poem drive home the message of what that means for the the earth and its citizens.

"pleading ,imploring,
beseeching someone hear my plea"

pleading ,imploring, and
beseeching all mean the same thing, so it is very redundant, and then you repeat "plea" again.

"I have adorned you with fragrant flowers
fed you when you were hungry"

You've never really made clear who "you" refers to. This letter is written "to whom it may concern." Perhaps you should be more specific about who you are talking to.

Wow! This piece is so creative and wonderful! There are emotions and images that are stunning. A fantastic use of personification to create a world worth trying to save. I think the word choice is perfect for this piece and though it is short it tells a marvelous story and makes a great point. The whole piece is stunning and I am deffinatly a fan of this, because it truly is excellent.

5/5 of course

I wrote an in depth comment and my computer restarted. Anywho, bro the concept of giving a voice to mother Earth is very good. Plus the title does the poem justice.

But I like the notion of Earth requesting its children/inhabitants to save it from a slow but imminent demise. Although, the threat isnt to the planet, for the planet will exist no matter what the weather on its surface. The real threat is to the existence of human race. The uncomfortable weather, and other calamities will lead to the extinction of mankind. Thus, measures must be taken to remedy the situation, to our depleting environmental conditions.

Nicely written bro.

Wow, this poem is fantastic. I love how you wrote it from the Earth's perspective, it made it more touching and believable.. it made it more emotional, as though the Earth is a person who is dying and we need to help survive.

It was a very well-written poem. I like the topic, it's something we really do ignore and we really 'forget' about global warming a lot... But this poem reminded me of it, and how we have to do what we can.

I like the structure as well, with "To Whom It may concern" like a letter, with sincerely at the end... it was really powerful.

Great job TJ!! =)

At first glance, the title didn't seem to be particularly catchy; however, after reading the whole poem, I don't think I will be able to come up with a better title than it already has. Though, a comma after sincerely would likely have been effective, too.

You have some interesting alliteration here, "fragrant flowers, sun shines and shouting silently". I love how you ended this poem, it shows how well thought out the opening line " To Whom It May Concern", along with the first few stanzas were to form the closure.

Great job, as always :)

I would love for you to read your poem on my radio show by phone. If interested email me, thanks !

This is a great poem. Am imagining one of these days, the world gets so mad that it just recites this poem to all of us, then mayb we will take it seriously and stop with pollution.

To all earthly residents

^^^^This one was a nice start because one can immediately know that this poem it's for everyone who lives on earth. So it incites me to continue reading.

I grasp at an invisible thread of hope
Shouting silently, pleading ,praying,
for someone to realize my pain,
as I am tortured daily with apathy
..........Help me survive

^^^^ The first sentence it's catchy. Then "for someone to realize my pain" I'm asking myself " What are you feeling? What type of pain? How are they torturing you? then it says with apathy.. Then my first thoughts were that they were not paying attention to you..
"help me survive" with this I'm thinking that perhaps you might be talking about hunger? education? or something else.. and I'm intrigue thus I want to continue reading.

Rain quenches my thirst, crops
drink their fill, yet the sun shines
down hotter then ever . Cant you see the
signs that I am slowly dying
.........Help me Survive

^^^^Then I was confused with this one. The rain indeed can quench one's thirst.. But I was wondering what is the relationship between the sun and the crops.. "Can't you see the signs that i'm slowly dying" Voila in this line one can immediately know that this poem is not about the author rather about something else.

I have adorned you with fragrant flowers
fed the masses when you were hungry
Yet I am ignored , abused,
devastated with ignorance of need
............Help me survive

^^^^^^I'm trying to tied down the puzzle, What is the author referring to.. But I know for sure its about something important and one can immediately know that we/some are not giving the gratitude that it deserves..

You've been shown the coming,
witnessed the destruction slowly
growing referred to as. global warming
Only you can save me
..........Sincerely The Earth

*Thanks Kiko for your suggestions*

^^^^^^^ and now with this stanza everything makes perfect sense, how global warming is affecting our home ( earth) and we are not taking care of it like we are supposed to.

This is a great peace, It does show how it's important to realize the damage that the earth is suffering.. and to make everyone aware that its a big deal.. pretty much a wake up call.

I also like the way you portrayed this poem as with the earth's perspective.