Comments : A Waterfall

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    A beautiful image here of something so sad.
    I love the idea that the waterfall represents your tears, hurt and pain

    Then a stray of dewdrops find
    a way to my lips, but how come
    they resemble the relish of ocean
    tears?
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    This has to be my favorite stanza. Describing the taste of your tears to be Salty like the ocean p. Very vivid

    Well done

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    Meme, this is undeniably a waterfall of organic emotions and flawlessness... Great one.

  • 12 years ago

    by RSJ

    This is powerful meme
    a good poem, a very powerful display of your poets skills

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow!! Beautiful!!! As always, I love your poetry hon!

    I love the idea of how these dewdrops fall... and how it's gradual... but then it becomes a waterfall.

    I loved these stanzas:

    Standing at the vulnerability
    of the sky, as yesterday drags
    its velvety darkness revealing
    a new beginning
    >> best part: velvety darkness !!!

    I opened my eyes to realize
    that every teardrop leads to a
    waterfall, so I surrender my tears
    with the tails of yesterday.
    >> love the idea of tears leading to a waterfall... it reminded me of a quote I came up with... it's something like "I'm a human waterfall"

    This poem really touched me and I loved it... I like how you compared the taste of tears to ocean tears, there's a saltiness about it, which inspired me to write my poem about the ocean.. and your description reminded me of my inspiration!

    Amazing poem hon! Well done =D

  • 12 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    This was beautiful and creative. I can't give you a single line or stanza as a favorite. For all are tied into this masterpiece

  • 12 years ago

    by Yakori bint Muhammed

    Such sadness portrayed in simple words but engrosses one as he/she reads on. Your use of nature for the theme of the poem, gives it a natural feeling. Very relatable and depressing. Beautifully crafted with your carefully selected words of natures finest. I likey! much luv. ;-)