You're worried about that end?
Actually, it's an amazing one;) You have brought this idea of time being a 'thief' to life with your descriptions and metaphors, and it's just so flowing.... I know how time can be! damn him! :p

I agree with abed .... This was a really well written piece the flow was outstanding well done ... think you should try a happy one :-)

I loved how you started the poem, you kept me curious the whole time; totally got my attention to read more.

And to be honest this verse gave me goosebumps
"The intrusive bugs crawl
and creep up behind me.
Their distressed glances and
icy whispers attack me."
^^
i found it very vividly described, and well expressed images too.

May I suggest something? You can end it this way too.
"Time is precious but is also a thief;
you think you own it, but it actually owns you."

Well done as usual sweetie :)

Good thoughts. You spoke out your heart. I would take to girL's suggestion, cos that statement is kinda debatable, but you're right on track. Don't stop writing!!

WOW! Id like to start at the beginning, but I'm so blown away by,

Time is precious but it is also a thief;
it can steal your most valuable essence.

That was just amazing. That needs to be a commonly said quote by all. I give you tons of credit for coming up with that. Beautiful!

Secondly, the title loved! and so funny how just reading the first stanza I could hear white noise and actually pictured when a TV goes all snowy and you just hear that fuzzy noise.

The intrusive bugs crawl
and creep up behind me.
Their distressed glances and
icy whispers attack me

^ What I loved about this was you used distressed glances, and icy whispers...dear lord where did you come up with that? You wuoldn't find those words describing a "bug" so the fact that you used it was awesome to me

Girl you know I love your work and get excited when you post a new poem. This was great!

First of all I think that the title is quite interesting because white is usually a color that resembles innocence, purity and maybe even "emptiness", but then I was wondering "white noise" - quite interesting, since I never thought of noises having colors and if so what that'd mean.

I thought that this was an interesting read, especially since the message you convey is so strong. Well done!

This poem was interesting. I loved its entirety, and it was quite brilliant how you used something like white noise and turned it into this. This was the work of a unique brilliant writer. And I liked how you compared time as a thief. Which certainly rings true. Wonderful work.

Wow... The ending.. was totally the perfect topper on such an amazing piece of poetry. I just felt every word and the imagery was amazing. White Noise made me think of ones of those "horror" movies or supposedly horror movies, but you painted it so much deeper in a morbid sense that it just hit the reader to the very core.

5/5

-Heather