Zealous

I love how all your thoughts come back from the beginning and the very end. In the middle you kind of went on a little spurt of spiderwebbing, which is typical for us females, haha. I love how you had so much hope and longing for this person, but you know your strength and know you're doing okay, even if you have to pretend you are.

I like your little ditties of rhyme throughout the beginning and kind of wish you would've kept it up throughout, it gave the poem a lighter feel, but I guess with it getting heavier in the tone and message towards the end, losing the rhyme made a bit more sense. Unsure if thats intentional, but thats what I got from it :)

I like the cross roads and hollow ribs - two things that seem very different, but it all makes sense in my head. Love this, Yaki :)

And again, I love your title :)

Your poems are so beautiful.
For some reason when I read them, its almost like youre just randomling, yet in the midst of the rambling and venting, this perfect piece of poetry appears with these amazing quotes and feelings that rip right through a readers heart. I love your work.

Time , time, time...give it time and your situation will be better if you truly choose to let it go :)

I always feel you in your writes, for you incorporate pure emotion into each stanza. I loved the ending Yaki, that tone of doubt, so strong.

As promised my full detailed comment:

Here's to the past,
for all the things we never
got to do,
and for all the things
we did-

^I like the dedication, that understanding of all that has been, the realisation so many things were missed but so much achieved, Great Opening.

my pen's heart is a fool,
who slowly reaches out to you -

^You always out your heart into your writes, so what a fitting line Yaki :)

there is a little hole
in my soul,
where you used to be -
now light pierces through.

..and I can see,
I can see,
that sunshine,
fragments of it..
but I see it.

^It is the way you write with emotion, like you have to speak, you need to know you are still, and believe me Yaki, that sun is there, and one day you'll feel it

for all that I do know,
and all that I am,
melt into
dimensions of doubt-

but I'm doing good..

for now,anyways.

^I can relate to this, the sense of doubt but that knowledge that for now you are okay, you know you might fall but at least now you are standing, and that's the strength in you.

The flow was flawless, and I love the messages in your writes, and just everything you say I feel so strongly.

Love
Tara
xxx