Great dialogue method. However, I think you should eliminate the "ME" & "MOM." They make it read more like a screenplay. If you establish the characters in the first stanza, the reader will follow it along without prompts.

Also, if you cut the syllable count in the longer lines, the poem would read with much better rhythm. Overall a great beginning.

PS: Welcome to PnQ

This is perfect you don't need to change a thing. Great job :)

U don't need to Change a thing
Keep it up and wow never read
This type of poetry
I'm just learning all these types

Amazing my moms been through a lot the past 4 years and we dont talk anymore she married this Guy tht and its been a constant batlle amazing poem tho

Oh my gosh! what a mess! I'm so sorry if this is based from what you really have gone through! It's tragic. And yeah, it's a given that you'd still love her after everything she's Put you through x.x wow. I've never seen a poem written in this dialect either before. This is really impacting and so so sad. :( ugh. Well written though, definitely!

I loved the way this was written made me want 2 continue reading. If this was about u sorry such a sad story. Keep ur head up and keep expressing urself it makes things easier trust me i know. 5/5