Never Ending Circle

Love another
It's never me
Second best
Is that the way it has to be?

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The last line throws off the flow and pace of the piece - but it's still a really great line. Very fitting for the mood.

Never your first choice
Just a friend
Someone you use in
The end

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I think the last two lines should read like:
'Someone you use
In the end'
But a really great link from first to second stanza. Well done.

It's not fair
It's not right
Sometimes I think you're
Looking for a fight

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This stanza was fast paced and flowed extremely well.

We always argue
It drives me mad
You think I'm happy
But I'm sad

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No one knows our true emotions but ourselves. We can easily deceive. But I think in this case, this other person didn't realise not because you were hiding it, but rather because they weren't paying attention.

I want your love
I want your heart
But your choices keep us
Apart

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Again I must say, I think the last two lines should read like:
'But your choices
keep us apart'
Other than that a really superb stanza - emphasises your feelings for this person and also somewhat your pain.

It's never me
It's always him
Well baby it's
Sink or swim

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I like this last line - you wouldn't think it belongs in a love poem (of sorts), but it completely works. Kudos to you.

Now or never
You have to choose
And once again I
Know I loose

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'loose' should be 'lose'
I think also 'I' in the last line should be "I'll"

But you'll come back
You always do
It's never ending between me and
You

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I think the last lines should read:
'it's never ending
between me and you'
Otherwise, a really strong ending. I like it.

Overall;
Besides a few arrangement issues, this poem is a really strong and somewhat relatable write. I really enjoyed reading it. Your emotions have been expressed really well and the flow was mostly in tact throughout the piece (I think it was only that one line in the beginning...).

Well penned. 5/5

We always argue
It drives me mad
You think I'm happy
But I'm sad

^Amazing how a few simple words can hit home so harshly. I like this, a lot. It's simple yet flows very well and rhymes perfectly. It has a lot of feeling and emotion in it and describes the deep anger behind it. Brilliant as always : )

Dani
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My sister in law, who recently passed away from diabetes complications, had the same experience. She fell in love with a girl who had recently broken up with her b/f. They had a brief fling, but she was always 2nd as the girl would go back to the b/f, then when it didn't work come back. She was in love and heartbroken at the same time. Sometimes love hurts.

The poem is meant to be from the point of view of a friend of mine who is a lesbian. She likes a girl who likes her back but that same girl still likes boys and always ends up letting her down for a guy.

I found this really interesting. I saw this as it was written with anger of passion since the words seem to portray some anger but also show love. I dont know and was confused at the line where you said its always him....

i loved this piece especially how it ends knowing evrything will be good again between you two