Unreliant (collab)

by Poet on the Piano   Jan 8, 2012


It was a mad flurry
of departures,
and something about
the way snowflakes
called your name
made me envious
of who you would become -
without me.

I thought sorrow
had no heart,
but it has found one to endorse-
winter lives on with the whistle
of your soul -
a train I found to be
immovable.

But with a fickle heart,
it departed...

How foolish of me to believe
that you would at least wave,
why haven't you waved
at the past?

Was it this dignity rippling
for you, too
to revive me
with one last glance?

You have murdered me
a thousand times before,
but know that
it was the last -
know that I won't succumb
to your memory anymore
nor plead the nights
to guide you back
through my door...

I'll try to leave
winter far behind,
so keep walking
over the mountain
rumbling under me...

I realize the pain
is slowly ceasing-
I can be a living love
without the false
specter of you.

And I'll survive
a thousand years more...
knowing I passed
your games,
knowing I don't miss
waiting for the train
to pick my heart up

once more.

-

Collab with the wonderful poet Lebanese Phoenix, please visit his page and leave a comment as well:

http://www.poems-and-quotes.com/author.html?id=471226

Thanks :)

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  • 13 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I see a flawless poem, filled with emotional value, with images that clearly touch the reader. Excellent collab, you two did a great job.

  • 13 years ago

    by Meme

    WooooooooW!
    You guys really work well together, its just a really smooth and wonderful collab.

    Loved the descriptions, the wordings, and the images you reflected so vividly.

    Great job guys :)

  • 13 years ago

    by Lioness

    Such depth and emotion in this poem and a very well written collaboration. The poem is so well written you would not think that it was two minds that came together as one!

    I love the first stanza - the use of the words snowflakes to describe someone and how they would become. I love this because Snowflakes are individuals and no snowflake is alike. So the idea that this person will transform into someone completely different without you? Well written

    I love how you said murdered a thousand times before and then in the last stanza - you wrote you'll survive a thousand years more. You connected these two so perfectly.

    The poem started off so sad but then ended in a positive note that you became your own complete person without her. Like a snowflake as well.

    I think you have both done well with this poem.

    Awesome write!!!

    x

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