A dusting of your presence hangs
over the doorway.
Delivering thoughts of you
to a mind that doesn't want you there..

Wow chelsea..d way u put ur feelings into poems is js outstanding..
Like d abv stanza speaks so much..i lv ur poems..ful points

Jeesuz woman...I'll be back

Your free verse poetry is really good Chels, I loved the hinged hearts door and the footprints engraved, and dusting of your presence. Very Nice
Lostlove :)

Holy,

Very good, Now I understand more what you were saying. Keep it up. Take as long as you need to write a poem for I know it will be fill with so much emotion and every time the flow of your poems are getting better and better.

Aww... this poem is saddd, but I loved the hopeful and optimistic ending. The beginning was heartbreaking... I could envision the imagery you created..

I love the idea of footprints being engraved on a floorboard, that was so beautifully written.
And i like how you ended the first stanza with "unmovable, too memorable" >> really simple words but they had so much meaning and depth.

I like how you described the dusting in the doorway, because that shows how time has passed but it's still difficult to move on from what happened.

The last two stanzas were hopeful, and I like how you mention how your heart has reason to clean, and to make room for new beginnings so you can heal...

It was powerful and beautiful! Well done! =D

There is a lot of raw emotion in this piece, and you have a real gift for poetic language.

As for critique, I feel that the wonderful poetic language is not consistent throughout.

I would love it if your poem could begin this way, and the rich language can be maintained throughout:

Hinged upon my heart is a door -
a dusting of your presence
lingers beside it...

I've read this piece a few times now and I have to say this poem touches me...each line almost brought me to tears... well done!

I really love the message behind this one, the way i interpret it anyway. i have a place inside my mind i call my inner sanctum where i only let people that are really close to me dwell, and if they leave that place it is devastating. the image of the door in your heart gave it a really homely feel i think, almost like the kind of soft image of a cozy cabin somewhere... anyway i digress. the message behind is really awesome, and while the way the word choice might be tweaked here and there i really think youre onto something with this piece.

There's so much emotion engraved in your poem. I really liked reading this one. The word choice is excellent and I think it's one of the best sad-optimistic friendship poems I've ever read.

Well done!!

Raw intense and well written. It's all been said above so will just say well done.

Very sad friendship poem, I like how you said a dusting of your presence. Makes me think of old pictures and letters just looming around, watching your every move and a feeling you cannot shake. Well done.