Its really a great poem:) 5/5

Paul Very nice poem :) The message is beautiful and clear in your poem. A life cut short is always always sad...

I have two things that may and may not work for you..the first line reads

The paper was in my hand...
^^^

With paper in hand,

sounds better to me and this line

She never grows no more

^^^^

She will never grow anymore,

Just my opinion and you know what they say about those lol

A beautiful dedication to someone whose past, but still alive in your heart.
Nice write Mr Paul

Thank u Lostlove

You know this poem makes me really think of the people in my life that has passed away, especially when their lives were cut too short.

It is a beautiful poem and I loved that it came straight from the heart.

You mention that it is dedicated to anyone who has lost sombody but it makes me wonder... who did you lose? The poem felt so real... the emotions were so real.

Well done

x

Very touching piece.... emotional write... each line was very moving...beautiful write ~

I lost a friend of mine some months back due to alcohol...i wrote that so that others might relate

It is truly a hard thing, losing someone you love.
If only we could know with surety, faith aside.... that they happily live on.

a perfect pen of your emotions.

God Bless

This is beautiful. I think as you said, anyone who had lost someone can relate to this. Your words paint such amazing images.

Man, I m drinking cold coffee while reading your piece, but I'm 100% that it was not the cold that made me shiver. This is a great piece. I found it really strong and emotional. I have lost a some important people in my life and I love the message in your piece. Thanks.

Amazing poem very beautiful and a hint of sadness,,very wonderfully done and terrifically written fantastic I loved and enjoyed reading this :) 5/5

A brilliant bittersweet poem... this is the kind poem that really comes from within with less effort in looking for words because it flows down through you're fingers smoothly and naturally.. I enjoyed it.. :-) 5/5

Wow amazing good job

There isn't any more I can say. Excellent. The fluidity of words and emotion are its strong point.

Your use of words is incredible
the first thing that popped in my mind was losing someone i loved
keep writing for your words are an inspiration to many
-Angel

This is soo sweet I love it <3 xxxxx

Aww this is so beautiful. U wrote it so good with pure emotions

Ahhhh amazing..

:) 5/5 <3

Awww this is such a heartfelt, touching poem. It saddened me, but really affected me.

I love the opening stanza, it was sweet I like that you were reminiscing the sweet memories!

The ending was sad, but real and honest...

Amazing poem!

Wonderful and well penned poetic sadness of an irreplaceable loss, in well thought of words that touches our heart when someone we dearly love passses away.

This poem seems to speak of a little angel, whose life was cut short abruptly, speaks to sadness of immense proportions in a parents/siblings/friends heart.

She will never grow (old) anymore,
(nor) witness the fruits of her labor,
(or) understand her purpose on this earth

Some minor corrections as shown above may help project your thoughts a little better, perhaps.

She (leaves) questions un-answered
but ('tis) one thing i know
that she suffers no more

Dedicated to anybody who lost somebody...

A very touching tribute to an untimely loss, may it be a little sister, a daughter, or a friend.

I think it's all been said above. So I will just add I enjoyed every line. It touched hearts and let emotions flow free. Excellent job Paul

Thank you for sharing. Your words painted a picture in my mind and touched my heart!