Comments : Orchid

  • 12 years ago

    by Decayed

    It sounds so... romantic...

  • 12 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    ^^ Yes it does sound really romantic, I love the use of orchids, such beautiful flowers.

    I think anything can be a poem, and I love this, it is very poetically worded

    love
    xxx

  • 12 years ago

    by Lioness

    This sure does sound poetic to me lol

    There is a romantic and peaceful feel to this poem that made me feel at ease while reading it.

    Such beauty in your words I could actually imagine these flowers in my head and the colours that you have expressed.

    Never seen beauty as such that
    I catch flowing with the fragrance of
    an orchid..
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    I love what you wrote here. The idea that the beauty was not only in the visual part of the flower but also the fragrance of it. The smell.

    Doesn't matter if dark pink like my lips
    or radiant white, like my skin.
    Doesn't matter if shaded with both colors
    like the childhood newly born inside
    my heart.
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    I love how you compared this flower to parts of you. It makes me think that you are as delicate as the orchad itself. I love how you compared the mixture of colours like the childhood that is in you. Child at heart. You can be both like the flower.

    But surely delicate like your words,
    deep like this love, and charming
    like your self.
    And that's exactly how I feel, with you.

    An everlasting Orchid.
    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
    I love how in the end you compared this beauty to someone you care deeply about. An awesome ending

    Loved it!

    x

  • 12 years ago

    by Meme

    I love Orchids to begin with :)

    Never seen beauty as such that
    I catch flowing with the fragrance of
    an orchid..
    ^^
    Orchids are known to symbolize Love, Beauty, so to use them in poem it really implies being in a state of beautiful love :)
    And to say that its flowing with the fragrance of Orchids just gives it a n extra meaning.

    Doesn't matter if dark pink like my lips
    or radiant white, like my skin.
    Doesn't matter if shaded with both colors
    like the childhood newly born inside
    my heart.
    ^^
    The metaphorical picture in this verse are incredible. The choice of words here and the description was just write to deliver the idea you had.

    But surely delicate like your words,
    deep like this love, and charming
    like your self.
    And that's exactly how I feel, with you.

    An everlasting Orchid.
    ^^
    The best ending you can ever have for such a poem, adding the word everlasting shows the continuity of the feelings you have.

    Great work :)

  • 12 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Wow this poem is beautiful!!! I love it!!! First, I love orchids as well! I love their significance, just like Meme explained, love and beauty <3

    I like how you compared the colors of orchids to your dark lips and radiant white skin... that part was really lovely.

    "Doesn't matter if shaded with both colors
    like the childhood newly born inside
    my heart." >>> I love the part about the childhood newly born inside you heart... such a sweet metaphor.

    "But surely delicate like your words,
    deep like this love, and charming
    like your self.
    And that's exactly how I feel, with you.

    An everlasting Orchid."

    >> wow!!! the ending is just beautiful and enchanting... it was so sweeet <3 I love itttt!
    I wrote a poem about a white orchid, titled "White Orchid" but it had a sadness to it.. so it was like a breath of fresh air to read this romantic and sweet love poem by you =)

    Great job sweetie!

  • 12 years ago

    by Dark Love

    Beautifully composed

  • 12 years ago

    by James Pike

    I agree with Lioness, in that I love how you compared it to parts of yourself. Nicely worded. Poem or not, thank you for sharing it. :-)