Congrats on your second place!

Just copying my comment from the contest.
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I've always been fond of Proserpina, perhaps more a familiar with her Greek equivalent Persephone but it was nice to see Roman mythology instead of Greek. What I liked with this poem was the incorporation of the myth and a personal connection the poet had to the Goddess. When given a prompt such as this it can be hard for the writer to make the topic their own, fact after fact are often written and it loses characteristic. I enjoyed how Proserpina became a metaphor for a person in the writers life, from what I gathered a lover. It was a powerful metaphor because it allowed the audience to form an image of this person the poet speaks of. The reference to "she like black butterflies brought death" was clever as Proserpina was known for being a deity of death however on a deeper level the writer was forming the idea that the female was known for being a bit of a heart breaker, bringing death upon those whose hearts she had at "her feet." The first word at the beginning of the poem should have been capitalized and after abruptly in the 6th stanza I didn't feel the comma was necessary. This piece was strong in emotion and strong in metaphors.

-Mel

^SECOND PLACE!

She beat me :P

Got to love that edit tool ;)

Thanks Jane!